I spoke with my Tutor earlier today he gave me feedback on Assignment 4.
My Tutor thought I had chosen a good photo for the assignment. We discussed its simplicity and power. I found it interesting that we shared many of the same views on the photograph and the USA.
We discussed how to narrow down the aim to get to the nub of the piece to get your point over using fewer words. This was extremely helpful. Plus we talked about how to write academically. I have a difficulty as I write how I speak. So academic writing is a challenge for me sometimes.
My tutor adviced me to change three things in the work.
I agreed with all that was said and so got to work straight away to make these changes. I checked the passage and changed where i found 3rd person narrative. I cant believe I had done so much of this. Plus it was mixed up with all other kinds of narrative so i had to concentrate on unravelling this work……..I think I succeeded.
I added 5 more references and checked they were correct links to the work i had referenced. Referencing doesn’t get easier. I added the reference for Susan Sontag which I had missed.
Finally I took some words out of the body of work to give me some words back to add a sentence to make my intentions clearer. Plus thinking and taking words out made my work more succinct. So my tutor was spot on with pointing to this.
I managed to get this back to 1000 words exactly whilst keeping my message in the work.
My tutor pointed me towards John Berger`s “Understanding a Photograph”. Which I downloaded and I am enjoying reading so far. It is helping me set up assignment 5 with its focus on meaning within a picture.
I asked my tutor what I should think about for Assessment. I have struggled to think what to present as most of the work has been written. The advice given was extremely helpful. I am experimenting with printing and printers to get the best from my photos. I will discuss results with my tutor when the prints arrive.
I enjoyed this assignment and could have written 3000 words about my chosen photo.
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